In a Flawed Glass - Doctor Who - PG-13

[phoenix64]

Title: In a Flawed Glass
Author: phoenix64
Fandom: Doctor Who
Characters: Jack, Lucy Saxon
Rating/Warnings: PG-13, some nasty violence
Word Count: 273
Spoilers: Just the end of s3
Disclaimer: Nothing is mine, nothing untoward intended, I'll put them back when I'm finished in the same condition (mostly) as they were in when I borrowed them
Notes: This hasn't been beta'd so any assault on your sensibilities is completely my fault. Written for consci_fan_mo, day 1 (hey, it's 11:17 my time!)



The first time that Lucy killed Jack she shot him once in the head and it was as boring as Harry had warned her it would be. She had wanted a death without the distractions of yelling and thrashing about so she could look in his eyes and see what changed there. But she couldn't see anything.

The second time she killed him she shot him in the stomach and there wasn't as much yelling and thrashing as she thought there would be, but she supposed that Jack had become accustomed to steeling himself to this sort of thing. It took longer for him to die but she still couldn't see anything.

Eventually she embraced the more intimate forms of murder such as stabbing. He didn't fight her, not really. Still, he wasn't without nerve endings and if screaming was going to satisfy her she would have been satisfied.

She looked in the mirror and she couldn't see anything different.

At one point she convinced Harry to track down a pair of steel-toed boots for her and she kicked Jack to death. Harry had asked her later that night if she had sung any Gene Kelly tunes but she didn't understand the joke. He'd had to ask because killing Jack had become a private affair, for both of them, long since.

The feel of Jack's skull giving way stayed with her for a long time.

She'd already lost count of how many times she'd killed Jack before she realized that she never talked to him. It seemed silly at that point to start.

She looked in the mirror and she couldn't see anything.

Comments

[shinealightonme]

Very chilling, especially the line about realizing that she had never talked to him.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad it worked - thanks for reading and commenting!

[aeron-lanart.livejournal.com]

I need a creepy icon, because this is *well* creepy. Actually it goes beyond creepy. Bloody good though.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

Wow, thank you!

I have to admit, that bat is too cute to be creepy. Of course it might just be me.

[rustydog.livejournal.com]

Wow. ::shivers:: I agree, very chilling, because it is so intimate. I'm especially loving the bits about Harry because -- I guess because it surprised me, showing the way Harry is involved but not really.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!

Yes, I have to admit one thing about Lucy is that I don't think she gets all the credit due her for being crazycakes all on her own. She really does fascinate me a bit, both by herself and her relationship with Harry.

[travels-in-time.livejournal.com]

Oh my. *hides*

I think we get so distracted by the singing dancing laughing crazy that we forget the absolute freaking sadistic crazy. Good reminder here.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

Aha, I sent you behind the couch! That means I win!

[karaokegal.livejournal.com]

Whoah! Brilliant and chilling. I love this, because it's one of those things that could easily have happened during THE YEAR. Poor Jack, but in a way Poor Lucy too.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

The final episodes of s3 are just so incredibly rich with storytelling potential, and yes, I have to admit one of my first thoughts upon finishing the series was, "I want Jack and Lucy fic, NOW please."

And hey, I get Jack!arse. Go me!

[unfeathered]

Oooh, lovely. There are not enough Lucy fics out there!

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

I totally agree. I still remember your Lucy & Drusilla fic fondly.

[unfeathered]

Whee! Yeah, I'm still very pleased with that one!

I did some Master/Lucy RP recently too with a magnificent Lucy and that was a hell of a lot of fun. :-)

[canaana.livejournal.com]

Very deft. Oddly, the thing that strikes me most about this fic is the title. A short, sharp ficlet is always harder than it looks, but for some few, the title bounces off the fic itself and the whole becomes more than the sum of its parts. You've really managed that, here.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

OK, now I just have to blush. Thank you so much. I'm really glad it worked the way I was hoping it would.

[http://users.livejournal.com/_medley_/]

This gave me major goosebumps. Something about the repeated "couldn't see anything" and the matter-of-factness of it. It's all too plausible, really.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

Heh, goosebumps FTW!

I have to admit I wanted to start with my strength, which in my case is that matter-of-factness approach I tend to think of as Deadpan Nasty. I find it a nice antidote to the usual in-your-face stuff that ultimately tends to make us more blase.

[http://users.livejournal.com/_medley_/]

"Deadpan Nasty" is a fantastic term for it.

[mad-jaks.livejournal.com]

Oh dark...

Dark is good. Not something I want to go to bed soon after reading though as

The feel of Jack's skull giving way stayed with her for a long time.
will probably give me nightmares.

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

I can't help it, it is pretty much my favorite tone of fic to write.

Please, no nightmares on my account.

[echo-fangirl.livejournal.com]

Wow. That's very, very creepy. Awesome. :)

[phoenix64.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad it worked - thank you!